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The Black Sun Mercenaries- A Brief History

A Band of mercenaries originally formed in secrecy by the kingdom of Sy’Reia, to aid them and other allied kingdoms during times of conflict.  The Mercenaries were of Elvyn, and Human decent.

In the year 465 there was a great war between the Allied Kingdoms of the 4 Phoenixes and the Realm of Daemons.

The Allied Kingdoms, fought to the best of their abilities, but the daemons proved to be stronger, as they countered with dark powers and the Daemons'’ deadly curses brought the Allies quickly and swiftly to their knees. The Black Sun Mercenaries, were the last resort…

King Galisere of Sy’Reia then revealed the Black Sun Mercenaries, as the elite force of the allies… Although many were lost to the Great War the mercenaries eventually pushed the daemons back to their own lands, and barricaded it with ancient spells only they knew

The Black Sun Mercenaries were soon written into the history of each kingdom as the saviours of the people…

Although the Daemons were barricaded from the Kingdoms of the 4 phoenixes, they began working on Spec ops to find and destroy members of the BSM while they were seemingly locked away. Fearing the return of the daemons and the slow and secret murdering of the Mercenaries, they supposedly disbanded to save themselves and the kingdoms…. and to this day, their story has still been the only way we can keep them in our Memory
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Ya know, i have been thinking about this for awhile now.... im not a very good writer but ill try to do what i want, and this is my first attempt..... may be very boring, but im working on it


Black Sun Mercenaries, Story (c) Me

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For a brief history about it I think its great. I can't wait till you post the rest of them... Don't fret it is a brief history it aint supposed to be full of excitement. You are doing great so far..
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Thanks! that is greatly appreciated... ^^

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It is usually the case that our powers of imagination work better in the darkness than in the light....-"The End Of All Things"
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It's great pre-story summary. I'm interested to read the first chapter when it's completed.

A strong suggestion that I have is to create chapters of a length maybe four to five times as long as this one when writing the main body of the story. Pay attention to pacing as you're putting it together. You don't want to have the story progress too slowly... but having events happen too quickly is no good either.

I can see that this has the potential to be quite good. Just keep putting your best effort forward... it's the only way to keep improving. :)

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Thanks :D Im Working on it while im away from the computer, since i usually am too tied up while online, and easily distracted.... so when i do have something ill hafta type it out then submit XD but its ok lol

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It is usually the case that our powers of imagination work better in the darkness than in the light....-"The End Of All Things"
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awesome. :boogie:

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Carpe Dium

Cloud Strife is a demon with a sweet face. :boogie:

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Great intro! Basic and straight to the point. One thing I'm gonna suggest for character developement (since chapter length and events were already covered) is to make a spread sheet of each main person. Put facts, history, weaknesses, strengths, and personal defaults down. And give each person a unique personality. Figure out how each one will react to differant situations. A big turn off for readers is when a character has an OOC moment or reaction. ^^

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